Re: Judy: Fresson question

[Judy Seigel <jseigel@panix.com>]

On Sat, 12 Jan 2008, Jonathan Bailey wrote:

> Hi all - and especially Judy,
>
> > (There's also a nice photo of Edward
> > looking a handsome 40-ish and smoking a cigarette by Fred R. Dapprich
> Do you mean the cigarette was by Fred - or the photograph?!?
Hi Jon....

Touche'... Of course that's not as bad as a dangling modifier, but you're 
right... a more felicitous phrasing might have been, "There's 
also a nice photo by Fred R. Dapprich of Edward Weston looking 
handsome..." etc.

The trouble with that is putting Dapprich first gives him an importance 
out of proportion -- he's not the point, we never heard of him -- Weston 
is.  A better solution might have been to add a word or a comma, or both, 
as: "There's also a nice photo of Edward Weston smoking a cigarette and 
looking handsome, by Fred R. Dapprich."  (Better?)

> I'm confused (wink)
YOU'RE confused !!  When I logged on tonight the first subject line in the 
first e-mail in my queue read, "oh my goodness.. your Penis is BELOW 
average!"  Imagine how confused I might be.

best,

Judy